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THE APPLE OF MY EYE
by Richard Brotbeck
Blame the bee,
if you must,
lusting for
some nectar sweet,
bouncing tree to tree
on apple blossoms,
Falling flowers
disconnect,
from stem and stone
unfasten, fall
to earth
with rusty leaves,
and lie
with last Autumn’s fashions,
Soon, the red
and ripened fruit,
too heavy for the arbor,
falls away
from trunk and root
to be a son or daughter.
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What a beautiful poem. This poem is more than acceptable it’s wonderful. Don’t let the views of critiques dissuade your poetic voice, commit to your style and speak louder. I never give false praise, and I never let what someone else thinks, determine what I think, well at least not with poetry. And with poetry, if you reach one person that likes what you have done then you can be assured there are many more who feel the same.
June 24th, 2010 at 2:25 am
As I said on another site, your voice is unique. "Cornball" is in no way a correct adjective to use with regard to this poem.
Addition: I am jealous of the poet; I want to beat his record of 18 thumbs down.
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June 24th, 2010 at 2:38 am
No - some genuine poetry WOULD be acceptable however.
Incidentally, absolutely not one single TD on this page is from me - can anyone else truthfully make that claim?
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June 24th, 2010 at 3:19 am
What a beautiful poem. This poem is more than acceptable it’s wonderful. Don’t let the views of critiques dissuade your poetic voice, commit to your style and speak louder. I never give false praise, and I never let what someone else thinks, determine what I think, well at least not with poetry. And with poetry, if you reach one person that likes what you have done then you can be assured there are many more who feel the same.
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June 24th, 2010 at 4:05 am
Elaine! are you trying to improve your score of thumbs downs here? I am going to compete with you by answering.. ok?
just call me Maddy… rofl
This poem is ok, Richard
… but ask yourself
does it sing?
does it dance?
does it hula hoop?
or is it serious and perhaps appeals to only a limited crowd?
these are all questions I ask
when I post or write a poem.. see I am a bit backwards, but I simply do not care.
Good morning and
acceptable or not, YAP is still a free site, and the only exclusions are by tall block walls
of course it is acceptable,
… yours truly
*Maddy* Iano’s favorite kook!
LOL!
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